The New Wife
While lying in the connection of my husbands arm between the part that pushesthe pen and punches the keys of his living, and the other partthat holds the weight of my daughterwhen she falls asleepon...
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I just can't resist... The poem is about unpredicting, and motion, uncertainty, shifting non-self-image. The text should morph and confuse...here is just an idea. Maybe not your type of...
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just from breezing through it I noticed these two pesky misspellings:Today he got the lazy wife.I didnt move around much,accept from the couch to computer *should be except*where I pecked out a part...
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Ryan, I think your enjambment is way off the mark and I urge nlife to consider her narrative to be fairly well balanced in that regard. Turn the original and your suggestions on their sides, look at...
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I'm not sure what line-length has to do with this: sort of "old school" to aim for even margins!I do not generally care for the style of poetry Ryan writes, but agree he is on to something here. There...
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And I agree with Erik.Normally, I would ner comment on a crit. This time, Ryan's cuts fleshes out what I too feltbubbling under excessiveness. (I don't mind longer poems)I like the connection and the...
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